As an experiment, as I needed a bridge to another experiment, I tried making a piece of reduction poetry. I used [personal profile] brownbetty's story Clad in Other Guise as my base text for... no particular reason, except maybe that I'm testing out her creative commons license. I will see if we are still friends after, I guess, and write up a summary of my observations!

So basically what I did was take my delete key to [personal profile] brownbetty's story, and then stop before I had an entirely blank page. The resulting poem was... far more disturbing than I first intended, so I am putting it behind a cut. You should probably take that as a content warning.

If this is what happens when I tear the flesh from your words, Betty, no wonder people have nightmares of skeletons.

in Guise

long skirt
hair twisted up
trying to look older
walk faster on the sidewalk
this look in her eyes
careful...careful
Little sister
don't take candy from strangers
outside the window There's a blank eye staring, but don't mind it
You you you, you just blend right in
carefully
just breathe
carefully...carefully
Open your eyes
Tell me what you see
a girl's bedroom
girl stuff, whatever that is
a girl in the mirror
in the mirror, a colour that's red
in the mirror, thumb over the curve of breast
Don't worry, honey. You're pretty.
Stop being so shy.
I'd like to see more, hope you don't mind.
strip off stockings
dark women's underwear
pull pillows from the end of her bed
smell of detergent like an opening flower
Good girl
pay attention
can't mess your lipstick
your nice skirt
carefully..
nails looking good
put a tissue to your lashes
and then straight home
blame unsteadiness on mary janes' heels.

 
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